Sunpaw {HollyClan}

[Morningcloud]

Name: Sunpaw
Age: 7 Moons
Gender: Tom
Desired Position: Apprentice
Clan: HollyClan
Short Description:

A smaller than normal pale orange tabby tom with green eyes.

Description:

Sunpaw is a very small cat, really under the shoulder by an earlength of most warriors. The other apprentices are much bigger than him. His fur is a pale ginger, a little more orangish than ginger. A few darker stripes run through it. His eyes are dark green, with a lighter 'ring of fire' around the pupil. In his right ear is a v-shaped nick. It is small, but pretty visible against his fur.

Experience:

Sunpaw has only recently become an apprentice, but he has learned plenty from his mentor. He knows extreme pain and the sadness of missing one very dear to him. He has been betrayed and hurt, but he understands now.

While he was a kit, His mother, Hawkfeather, had not planned on having kits. She refused to speak the name of the father, And refused to be anywhere near the kits. Two of them died, But Sunpaw survived. A kind she-cat in the nursery, named Crowstorm, took him as her own and nursed him. Crowstorm admitted she was not his mother, that Hawkfeather was. Hawkfeather became a cruel mistress, she began to enjoy the pain of others. Sunpaw loved her just the same. But it lead to much. A few days before Sunkit would become an apprentice, Hawkfeather commited murder. On Crowstorm. Sunpaw was afraid now, scared and angry. He attacked Hawkfeather straight away. Hawkfeather fought back, only giving him a few slashes. The worse was a bleeding nick in his ear. The leader banished Hawkfeather, but Hawkfeather only laughed and left. Sunpaw was made an apprentice that night, but his mentor has yet to be figured out. He mourns for the loss of Crowstorm.

Personality:

Sunpaw is friendly, overall, but very timid and worried. He is afraid to be alone for a few things, wanting to be with another. Sunpaw likes to play around with the apprentices, and Patrols are fun to him, even if its really early. Sunpaw likes to sit in the Elder's den and listen to stories, but sometimes shirks his duties for it. He sometimes spent a little but more time in the Elder's den doing stuff he didn't exactly want to do. Sunpaw has learned many stories and likes to tell them to kits and sometimes play with the kits.

[Ravenstar]

your personality is suppose to have at least SIX sentences, so add at least one more please, and also it says HollyClan in your subject but SageClan in the actual bio, so you'll need to change that as well, other than that it looks good but you need to change those things before I accept you.

[Morningcloud]

Whoops, Any better?

[Ravenstar]

xx Accepted